I am a Year 6 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Kahikatea Hub and my teachers are Whaea Sharlee and Whaea Tamzin. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Friday, August 13, 2021
facts about sports.
writing about what is better sports or music ? I choose sports.
You have some interesting points in this piece of writing about sports. However, the task for this writing was to write a persuasive piece on why you think sports is better than music. You have not done this, but instead wrote some facts about sports. A persuasive piece of writing focusses on you trying to convince the reader to agree with your point of view. You should have done some research about this topic to help with your writing.
You also need to include the N.L and R.T for this writing. You could find this on the writing slide from the original slideshow.
I think you could have also added a few more labels to this post such as 'writing'.
Kia ora Jas,
ReplyDeleteYou have some interesting points in this piece of writing about sports. However, the task for this writing was to write a persuasive piece on why you think sports is better than music. You have not done this, but instead wrote some facts about sports. A persuasive piece of writing focusses on you trying to convince the reader to agree with your point of view. You should have done some research about this topic to help with your writing.
You also need to include the N.L and R.T for this writing. You could find this on the writing slide from the original slideshow.
I think you could have also added a few more labels to this post such as 'writing'.